ALT1: ... that the Meriden, Waterbury and Connecticut River Railroad was shut down just 11 years after it opened? Source: Karr, Ronald Dale (2017). The Rail Lines of Southern New England (2nd ed.). Pepperell, Massachusetts: Branch Line Press. p. 89
ALT2: ... that the Meriden, Waterbury and Connecticut River Railroad, which was originally created as an alternative to the New Haven Railroad, was later absorbed into the New Haven after just 11 years of operation? Source: Karr, Ronald Dale (2017). The Rail Lines of Southern New England (2nd ed.). Pepperell, Massachusetts: Branch Line Press. p. 89
ALT3"... that the Meriden, Waterbury and Connecticut River Railroad, created as an alternative to the New Haven Railroad, was absorbed into the New Haven after just 11 years?" Source: Karr, Ronald Dale (2017). The Rail Lines of Southern New England (2nd ed.). Pepperell, Massachusetts: Branch Line Press. p. 89
Reviewed:
Comment: Note to reviewer:QPQ is not needed as this is only my fifth ever nomination.
Comment Hi Locomotive207, thanks for creating this article. I have edited the article and plan to make some substantial improvements today, so I'm recusing from reviewing, but I don't think the current hook is very compelling. Railroads near rivers flooding is a fairly routine occurrence (even more so in the 1800s before the advent of national flood control legislation); I do not think the proposed hook meets the interesting criterion. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:37, 12 February 2023 (UTC)
Trainsandotherthings, thank you so much for your expansion and GA nom. You've added a level of content and detail to this article that I never could have added with my limited sources. With regards to the hook, I agree it may be a little dull. I'll draft up an ALT1 and see what the reviewer thinks.--🚂Locomotive207-talk🚂 21:31, 12 February 2023 (UTC)
I suggest ALT1: "... that the Meriden, Waterbury and Connecticut River Railroad was shut down just 11 years after it opened?" Source: Karr, Ronald Dale (2017). The Rail Lines of Southern New England (2nd ed.). Pepperell, Massachusetts: Branch Line Press. p. 89 Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:10, 14 February 2023 (UTC)
That seems like a good hook. I've also added an ALT2 which is pretty similar to yours but longer just in case. Thanks for the review Epicgenius.--🚂Locomotive207-talk🚂 21:17, 14 February 2023 (UTC)
@Locomotive207: Thanks for the response. Sadly, at 204 characters, ALT2 exceeds the 200-character maximum. It's unnecessarily wordy - for instance, you can say "created" instead of "which was originally created". This conveys the exact same thing: "... that the Meriden, Waterbury and Connecticut River Railroad, created as an alternative to the New Haven Railroad, was absorbed into the New Haven after just 11 years?"I've also modified the hook so it links directly to New York, New Haven and Hartford Railroad, rather than to the redirect New Haven Railroad, as redirects should not be linked from the Main Page. Epicgenius (talk) 23:23, 14 February 2023 (UTC)
My bad on that one, Epicgenius. I've added the edited-down version to the top as ALT3. At this point, either ALT1 or ALT3 should be good to go.--🚂Locomotive207-talk🚂 01:53, 16 February 2023 (UTC)
Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Y - Offline/paywalled citation accepted in good faith
Interesting: Y
QPQ: None required.
Overall: Nice work on this article. I'm crediting Trainsandotherthings for this nomination as well, given his exceptional work on the article. The nominator, Locomotive207, has fewer than five QPQs at this moment, so the QPQ requirement is satisfied. ALT1 is good to go, but I don't think the original hook will be interesting to a broad audience, so I have stricken it. Epicgenius (talk) 15:55, 14 February 2023 (UTC)
Nice work on this article. I'm crediting Trainsandotherthings for this nomination as well, given his exceptional work on the article. The nominator, Locomotive207, has fewer than five QPQs at this moment, so the QPQ requirement is satisfied. ALT1 is good to go, but I don't think the original hook will be interesting to a broad audience, so I have stricken it. Epicgenius (talk) 15:55, 14 February 2023 (UTC)